Friday, October 5, 2012

Please rate my poem ?


Question


Please rate my poem ?
Please be honest


Answer


Loved it, loved it!! Except I think I would change the last sentence. Im not sure to what, but when youre reading the poem, and the walls slowly fall, you wouldnt expect the next line to be the sun embraces. I dont know, it just didnt seem to fit right. Otherwise, excellent!!



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